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My face is a town
that she's put in her rearview mirror
I've been the way there and back again
Now I have no way out

The only lovers that know my lips
are the vices I can't stop clinging to
We all take our medicine
then creep home under the radar

I'm just killin' time
until time kills me
2012 Matthew M. Danielson

from Chapter 15: The Twilights of Life
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Student Writer
Clever.
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MMDanielson Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Professional General Artist
Thank you.
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Oseltamivir Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome! I like how you don't spell things out for the reader so we have to actually use our brains to catch what you mean ;)
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MMDanielson Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2012  Professional General Artist
Thank you very much. I try to be a little cryptic, but not so much that people don't get the message. It can be a difficult line to maintain.
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Oseltamivir Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
But you do it well :)
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natirey7 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Student Writer
The first two lines are truly perfect.
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MMDanielson Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012  Professional General Artist
Thank you so much. They're my favorite lines as well. I liked them as soon as I wrote them down.
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012
All of life's streets seem to be One-Way.
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MMDanielson Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Professional General Artist
That they are. You have to go around the block to get across the street.
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012
It's a conspiracy, I tells ya. Damn that Stephen Hawking and his arrow of time. Not that I actually believe in time. :D
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MMDanielson Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Professional General Artist
Time is something humans invented to try (and fail) to control their lives.
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012
I'm glad they failed. It's just a bunch of mathematical formulas based on counting the ticks made by metal that swings back and forth to no good purpose.
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feroccello Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012
Very good poem. I like it so much. The first two verses are just brilliant.
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MMDanielson Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Professional General Artist
Thank you very much for your kind comments. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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scribblingnooly Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Professional
Just a brilliant piece in it's sharp and poignant entirety.
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MMDanielson Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Professional General Artist
Thank you so much. Your comments mean a lot to me.
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scribblingnooly Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Professional
You're welcome, my friend :-)
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LittleFishPenguin95 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this. :(
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MMDanielson Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Professional General Artist
Thank you very much! I'm glad you like it.
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LittleFishPenguin95 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome! :meow:
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jochannon Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012
If you want to publish any of yourf work, look me up: [link]
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