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The day I was borne,
just as I stepped into the pit, I said:
'I'm not coming all the way back'
My comment blew over the conversation
as would an impotent storm cloud
When I think in flames,
I speak in waves
My mouth is a shore
where water licks flame
My defenses are ready-made
Your offenses are presumed,
amplified, and begrudged
My weakness is not weak enough
I don't qualify for your concern
I can't put my finger on it,
but I'm under the thumb
2011 Matthew M. Danielson

from Chapter 11: A Heart Dry as Leaves
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allixson Nov 24, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love this part "When I think in flames,
I speak in waves" and the whole, but that part the most.
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MMDanielson Nov 25, 2011  Professional General Artist
Thank you so much. I'm glad you like it!
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:iconderelictvampire:
Very nice. I understand that confusion. "I don't qualify for your concern"--great line...with so much underneath it. Something about this piece seemed to resonate for me with something I wrote. Could I share it with you?
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MMDanielson Oct 27, 2011  Professional General Artist
Thanks so much for your compliments. Please do... :iconearplz:
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:iconderelictvampire:
Ha, like the earplz. Anyway, not sure why your poem felt simpatico with this one (maybe you can tell me), but here it is: [link]
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MMDanielson Oct 27, 2011  Professional General Artist
The parts that seemed to match up for me, were the misconstrued communication, the negativity that is trapped [willingly or otherwise] and somewhat undefinable, and most of all, the need for understanding, not pity.
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:iconderelictvampire:
Yah, that's it. I had a feeling you'd figure it out, lol. Well reasoned and well said.
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MMDanielson Oct 27, 2011  Professional General Artist
Thank you.
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:iconxaathel:
I really like this style.
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MMDanielson Oct 27, 2011  Professional General Artist
Thank you very much.
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